Revision Plan Example
Essay 3: “The Woman in the Wallpaper”
1.
Focus
Focus 2.Organization
Organization3. Development (Support of Ideas)
a.I will delete the quotation in the first body paragraph about the smell of the wallpaper. It does not work there.
I will delete the quotation in the first body paragraph about the smell of the wallpaper. It does not work there. b.I will add at least two new quotations to the first body paragraph to support how the narrator is treated like a child by her husband.
I will add at least two new quotations to the first body paragraph to support how the narrator is treated like a child by her husband.c.I will add a new quotation to the second body paragraph to support how the narrator feels trapped.
I will add a new quotation to the second body paragraph to support how the narrator feels trapped.d.The last quotation in the second body paragraph is too long, so I will shorten that quotations.
The last quotation in the second body paragraph is too long, so I will shorten that quotations. e.I will change the focus of the last body paragraph so that I will go into more depth with the symbolism of the wallpaper, with new quotations and new ideas. I probably will delete most of the second half of the paragraph.
I will change the focus of the last body paragraph so that I will go into more depth with the symbolism of the wallpaper, with new quotations and new ideas. I probably will delete most of the second half of the paragraph.f.In all three of the body paragraphs, I plan to add more explanation of the meaning of the quoted words. I sometimes present a quotation without explaining what it means or why it is important.
In all three of the body paragraphs, I plan to add more explanation of the meaning of the quoted words. I sometimes present a quotation without explaining what it means or why it is important.g.Only the first body paragraph has information from a secondary source, so I will look at the secondary sources again to try to add at least one quotation from the sources in the second body paragraph and one in the third body paragraph.
Only the first body paragraph has information from a secondary source, so I will look at the secondary sources again to try to add at least one quotation from the sources in the second body paragraph and one in the third body paragraph. 4.Style
Style5.Mechanics
Mechanics